BOI-1 Word Cloud

Yikes!

At the beginning of the month (maybe earlier) I began a “tighten up” round of revisions on HEIR OF ISIS.  Being that it was my 6/7th? round of revisions, I knew I didn’t have serious ripping of plot stuff to do.  However I also knew that I had a tendancy to use some words as a crutch… in order words I was overusing a ton of words.  I had saw this amazing post (or maybe it was a tweet) a while back about using wordle to help with that.  And the above image is the end result.

Yeah…

About that.

So first there are the names.  You might not think that’s all bad, but maybe it was a sign that I was using the character’s names too often.  In normal speech I don’t always call out my friends’ names.  In fact the only (or one of) person I know who does that regularly is my mom, whenever she needs me.

Aside from the names there’s the real problem, the crutch words: looked, just, etc…

For the justs that was easy enough.  I did a find and replace and deleted them all from my MS.  That was about 200+ words alone.  Then I went back through and reread the MS, adding back in the just where I thought it really needed it (only a handful of times).

As for “looked”, well that was a sign I was telling and not showing.  My main character doesn’t have to “look” at everything.  It’s in first person.  Now that edit took much longer but it was totally worth it.

Then there were other things.  I went through and highlighted all the backs and ones and times and eyes.  Sight is a “big theme” of my book yet maybe I was overdoing it.  As for “back” and “time” and “one”, I went through just to see why I was using those words so much.

I’m very happy with my results, and I definitely recommend you giving Wordle a chance.  At the very least it’s cool to play aorund with the settings of the word cloud and the pretty colors 😉

Here’s the word cloud of this post (minus common words like “a” and “the”…just like I did for my MS):

wordle blog post

See, look…I just love using “just” (hehe)

What are some favorite revision tips of yours?

Whimsically Yours,

PnC

Written by Patrice

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Patrice

I didn’t realize how much of a visual person I was until I tried wordle out and was immediately able to see everything I needed to fix.

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Emma

Wordle I need to have a look at that.
It was pointed out to me by an editor recently that I use the words “eyes” a lot. I went back to my latest manuscript and cut that word by a third. I also now look out for saying things like “she watched” “she glanced” an try to describe what the character is seeing in front of her instead of using filters.

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Patrice

Yeah I get that, those are horrible crutches that I didn’t even realize I used that often…hopefully this will nip that in the bud 😉

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